The shadow did not want to live with the other shadows. The village was quiet with tall homes and peaceful people.
Slowly the shadow sneaks out the alleyway. There was a knight with wings with water coming from the trumpets on the top of the statue. The moon was bright and shiny.
There was something glowing from the library. The shadow was amazed it looked like a golden piece of light.
He went inside the library towards the light. He touched the candle and burnt his hand. The shadow walked out of the library and sat on top of a building and looked at his hand.
A man blew out the candle and the shadow got a fright. The shadow ran back to the library and hugged the candle. The candle turned from a candle to a twirling smoke, emerging as a shadow. Now they were friends.
Wow - what great imagery you have used in your writing! I loved the ending how the candle ended up as a shadow as well. You have used a good variety of sentences and ending your story with a short sentence works really well.
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ReplyDeleteI really liked the ending it was short and really nice for an ending. We also used to do Creative writing and I wrote about strange things happening in a house.How did you come up with that story?
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