Jess, you add clauses to your sentence - extra pieces of information... as the clouds move slowly.....After many hours walking...I love the way you have used speech to drive the story on ... and even worked very hard to put the speech marks in correctly...“Why, Why? I thought you were the one!” runs along then stares pipe and stairs at the window.
To Jess,We think it is AWESOME!!!! We like the way you had a clear voice and you also had good describing words.From Lucy and Chloe
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