5 Sentence Challenge Commenting

We are part of the blogging community and need to take the time to comment constructively on the work of younger writers.  This is because we are AKO Kids.

Take a look at this link and the class FIST LIST to remember what the success criteria are for commenting.  Constructive comments

This is the current Five Sentence Challenge Prompt.

Here are the children who need constructive comments on their work. LINK
Can you find the numbers that I am responsible for commenting on?

At the end you need to put these things:

Sam 9 & Kaylee 9 - Kids from New Zealand
http://springstonteamendeavour.blogspot.co.nz 

Constructive Comments from students

Take a look at the comments you are making on the writing of others.  Are they constructive comments?

Submitted on June 20, 2014 at 10:24 AM | In reply to phoebe (Guest).

Hi Phoebe, You could go back and reread your comment and correct the mistakes in your comment. 
Rosie


Submitted on June 19, 2014 at 9:50 AM
Hey Ryan 
Thats is Wicked! The emerald staff will really help you when you face ender dragon. Why do you like the Hunger games?

Submitted on June 17, 2014 at 11:57 AM

Hi Alfonso I like the way you put the story together. Maby you could of had your own piture. How do you enchant. 
By Jack B – 9 years old. 
http://springstonteamendeavour.blogspot.co.nz/

Submitted on June 17, 2014 at 11:54 AM

WOW 
what a good post Jack. 
love the way you said like a thunder storm to describe the cat. 
I think you need to add more detail to your story.
Emma

Submitted on June 17, 2014 at 11:47 AM

I do like your post Aria, but one of your sentences do not make sense. 
You should go back and reread your story to see if it makes sense.
Nina

Oooo - Rosie is famous!

Check it out!  Rosie is the first blog post on the http://blogdipping.org.uk  website.  The person running the website is

the amazing person who runs the 5 Sentence Challenge and 100 Word Challenge.

Go and have a look at Rosie on the blog and I challenge you to go back a post on our blog and visit the writers of the 5SC and give them some AKOKids comments!

AKO Kids - can we write comments for The 5 Sentence Challenge?

We are getting lots of constructive comments on our 5 Sentence Challenge posts.  Are we good at writing constructive comments?  Could we help other writers by giving them a constructive comment?

Check out the rules for writing a constructive blog comment....
http://springstonteamendeavour.blogspot.co.nz/p/blog-comments.html

Click here to find the blogs you can comment on.  Remember...
1.  Use their name
2.  Say what is good
3.  Give and idea on what to fix - give an example
4.  Finish with a question or encouragement
5.  Lastly add our URL so they can come back and visit us. http://springstonteamendeavour.blogspot.co.nz/  

Remember - we know about writing and believe in KidsAKO (Kids teaching kids) so get in there and help others become better writers too!  It is all about being the 'Experts' in blogging and helping others.

Minecraft Tips Blog

Check out the blog some learners are creating.  They are 11-12year olds.  What can you learn from them and what constructive comments can you give them?

http://thecraftersminecraftguide.blogspot.co.nz/

Student blogs ..... Check these out!

Some of the E-Team have been busy blogging.  Check out their posts by clicking on the link and give them a comment.

Do you think you are ready for your own blog?  You would need to be giving regular effective comments and posting 1-2 times a week on the class blog.

http://kidblog.org/TeamEndeavour/

Team Work - Room 8 Pt England School

Check out what the Year 3 students in this cool class think about team work.  We might like to leave them a comment.  Make sure you add our blog address.

Their blog address is http://pestuala.blogspot.co.nz/.  Let's go and visit!

 

Comments on our writing

We are posting our writing on the writing blog.  We want you to give us comments on what we are doing well and what we can do to improve our work.  Please visit and help us improve our writing.

http://our-writing-rocks.blogspot.co.nz/

What rules do you need for 'Team Work'?

 

We have discovered that there are some rules that make team work more effective. Look at our comments - these are the rules we think you need!

Happy harvest - from my garden.

I visited The Secret Garden this morning and everything has been GROWING!  We will have to harvest the last of the allotments then dig them all over and begin again.  You should have seen the weeds!

Yesterday I took my Christmas present out into the garden and picked lots of produce.  Can you recognise anything in my basket?  I wonder how many different plants we can name in comments below.  Isabella, I know you are watching and will be the first to respond.  Who else is checking out the blog before school?

Bonus points for anyone who can tell me what this type of basket is called!

How many visitors?

Thanks to a reminder from Sophie - I took a peek at our blog visitor counter and guess what...


Lady Bug Note Generators

Quadblogging Challenge

Time to hit Room 3 at Sacred Heart School with all our effective comments.

They don't have many posts on their blog so go searching through the tabs at the top to find things to comment on.  You could ask them questions or teach them some Maaori words on their Maaori Tab.  

Brookburn Quadblogging School

After some great comments for our focus week from Wix Primary, it is now time to start laying those comments on the Brookburn Blog. 

So get your commenting skills out and get over to Brookburn School.

Don't forget our success criteria for an effective comment. 

1. Are they positive and encouraging comments?

2. Are they questioning comments?
3. Are they constructive comments? (what they could improve)
4. Do they make sense and have correct spelling / punctuation?
5. Would you feel good to get this comment on your post?

Whip off down to Wix School - let the quadblogging begin!

Here it is - day one of writing effective comments on our quadblogging buddy blogs. 

Our first school to focus on is Wix.  Remember what you found out about them and think carefully about the comments you write.

1.  Are they positive and encouraging comments?
2.  Are they questioning comments?
3.  Are they constructive comments?  (what they could improve)
4.  Do they make sense and have correct spelling / punctuation?
5.  Would you feel good to get this comment on your post?

Visit Wix Primary School this week.....

 

24,002 Blog Visitor Party

We celebrated 24,002 visitors to our blog on Friday. 

We had to think carefully about how to say this number and think it is a pretty large number of visitors.  Thanks to Eli and his mum for the yummy fudge and Graeson and his mum for the chocolate cake.  

Let's plan another party for our new target - 30,000!

 

Effective Blog Comments