Monday, 8 November 2010

Sour Worm poems with similes

Sour Worm
A sour worm looks like a ridged elastic mountain 
with sugary snow crystals on top of it. 
It  smells like sweaty shoes 
that make you catch your breath. 
But when you eat one
its little kick sets off a sour explosion.


  1. Nice poem Jake! It is a funny yet convincing poem. I could literally taste them in my mouth!

  2. A great comment Freddie.

    Which success criteria has he achieved? Look at the WALT sheet with the success criteria at the bottom or your writing sample sheet.

  3. I like how you used different words in your poem and expressed them differently.

    Josh the E-team

  4. Wow nice poem Jake. You really described the sour worm and its taste. I don't think I want to eat one.

    William the E-team.


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