The Dream Giver - Aria

A yellow glow darts in the damp dark sky. Wings clatter like an earthquake and boney fingers open an old orphanage window shutter. The strange man is nearly naked. He looked into the room to see sleeping children lined up in rows. Then he lifted the sack that contained glowing golden eggs that gave children their wildest dreams.

The first little person was a boy with an open book lying on his bed. The Dream Giver put some gold liquid on the astronaut book and in a poof the boy in his dream. He was in space. The boy moved one leg kicked as part of his dream. It made a golden egg fall off the bed and break onto a book of The Shadow Monster!  This was not a good dream!

Suddenly the young astronaut was sucked into a vortex of light, from a peaceful dream into a book of danger. He woke up in a world full of tall green trees. He didn’t think he was safe. Suddenly he heard a terrible growl. The boy turned to see a scary temple entrance with a big open mouth. In the dark he saw two yellow eyes looking at him!

Back in the orphanage the Dream Giver was trying to find the golden egg that fell on the bad book. He had to help! 

In the dream the small boy was running for his life. He ran out of the forest and onto a cliff. He turned around to see the Shadow Monster. There was nowhere to run. He was trapped. He clenched his body and said to himself, “This is the end!”  Just then the boy heard a tinkling sound. It was the Dream Giver dropping magical eggs from the sky. As they hit the ground, small trees grew. They grew super fast and trapped the roots around the beast. The Shadow Monster fell to the ground. 

The boy woke up back in the orphanage and looked in his book to see his own dream. From the corner of eye, he saw a shadow and then it was gone. He always wondered who had saved him. 

Our own 5 Sentence Challenge

Check out this image and fill in the SOLO sheet to gather nouns with adjectives, verbs with adverbs, similes and magical words. You can either choose to write this as a five sentence challenge or do a 10 minute challenge on it!

The Dream GIver - Quaid

In the still darkness, while the church steeple stood tall, a light flickered from a window. Another glowing light darting through the sky. Secretly flying.  His little fingers slipped through the wooden shutter of an orphanage to slowly open it. The starange man's dragonfly wings clatter around when he gets closer.

The Dream Giver who was he and what did do every night?

As he enter the dark dormitory, the Dream Giver switched his ancient goggles to night vision. They had protected his sensitive eyes on the last trip to harvest dream eggs. With no time to lose, he hovered over a bed with the golden glowing eggs.

His precious dream eggs were cracked onto a book with an astronaut on it. Suddenly, the little boy from the bed was floating in space like an astronaut. The stars shone. This was the best dream he'd  ever had.  while he floated happily, his legs twitched on the bed, causing a golden egg to fall. It broke onto the page of The Shadow Monster. This was not a good dream. Lights flashed and the small astronaut was sucked into a wormhold to another universe.

He woke up on a island with big tall trees and dancing butterflies. The small boy crept around and he saw a cave statue of a ancient face. Then he saw a mystery temple. It had glowing yellow eyes. It was the Shadow Monster. It was chasing him. He ran for his life then he nearly fell off a cliff. He turn around and saw a giant beast! The big beast roared at the astronaut face and saliva flew everywhere! 

Back in the orphanage, the Dream Giver saw the terrible dream in the book.  He had to help! Bravely he flew into the dream and began throwing magically eggs at the monster. They soaked into the ground and grew giant roots and branches. The beast was trapped.  The boy was safe!

The boy woke up and looked at the book that was on his bed. It was turnned to the page he had dreamed about. The Dream Giver's shadow showed on the bed and then zipped out of the room.

The Dream Giver - Sammy

Once upon a time there was a Dream Giver who gave dreams to people. He went to an orphanage and gave dreams to kids. 

The first dream he gave was a ballerina dream and the second one was a dream about an astronaut. One of the children knocked a golden glowing egg off the bed and onto a page in a book about the Shadow Serpent who was a bad creepy monster.  It chased the boy in the dream to the edge of a cliff. Then the Dream Giver came and dropped an egg.  It grew into a seedling which grew over the monster and squeezed the monster to death.

The boy woke up and started to read the book on his bed and realised it was all about his dream.

The Dream Giver by Rosie

In the dark shadows of the middle of the night, things happened while the villagers slept. A sudden flash of light flittered past heading towards the orphanage. His dragonfly body was bony and he wore hardly any clothes - except for a pair of magical night vision goggles. His big saucer eyes hid the hidden the secrets within his soul. This strange man was the Dream Giver. His bony fingers wrapped around the wooden shutter. 

He crept in and looked around the orphanage.  Out came the first illuminated egg from his rough sack.

The Dream Giver gently cracked the next illuminated egg onto the football at the end of a little boy’s bed. The football players came running out of the egg. "They shoot. It’s a goal for the All Whites!" came the shouting sounds over the loud speakers. The Dream Giver stood up with a satisfied look on his face. 

 The next egg got cracked onto two little figures of a Border Collie and a Kerry Blue Terrier. In the dream the girl was in a field of long grass next to her dogs Fern and Pipi. They played and the day never ended. 

 The final egg was cracked onto a book of a astronaut opend on a small boy's bed. He suddnely found himself happily doing summersaults through space. His legs wer wriggling and knocks an egg onto a book called The Shadow Lizard. This was not a good dream! A huge whirlpool sucked him up into a new world. 

The small boy woke up dazed into a world of Autumn trees and surrounded by dancing butterflies. Then he turned to see threatening carved faces made of stone with scary faces. Then with a sudden BOOM, two yellow eyes jumped out from beneath the hidden cave. The Shadow Lizard chased him.

Back at the orphanage the Dream Giver saw the terror that the boy would be seeing. He had to help!

The little boy was running for his life. He ran straight through the forest and then had to skid to a halt at the edge of the cliff. He turned in horror and saw the large Shadow Lizard sneering over him, breathing heavily. The boy covered his eyes so he didn't see the great drops of slobber! The roar was like a tremendous THUD! This was the end he thought to himself. Then he heard a mighty roar of anger. He looked up to see the Dream Giver dropping eggs to the ground. The giant branches wrapped around the Shadow Lizard then its head hit the ground. It was dead! The boy was safe. 

Back at the orphanage, he woke up and found the book of his dream open on his bed.

5 Sentence Challenge Commenting

We are part of the blogging community and need to take the time to comment constructively on the work of younger writers.  This is because we are AKO Kids.

Take a look at this link and the class FIST LIST to remember what the success criteria are for commenting.  Constructive comments

This is the current Five Sentence Challenge Prompt.

Here are the children who need constructive comments on their work. LINK
Can you find the numbers that I am responsible for commenting on?

At the end you need to put these things:

Sam 9 & Kaylee 9 - Kids from New Zealand
http://springstonteamendeavour.blogspot.co.nz 

10 Minute Writing Challenge

This week there are two workshops using these images as a 10 minute writing challenge. You must complete the worksop once and publish the piece on your blog.

The images are 'Free to use' from Richard at http://www.geograph.org.uk/photo/4240829

Words and information you might find useful for your challenge:

• Tower of London, England
• Installation by ceramic artist Paul Cummins
• One hundred years since Britain’s involvement in the First World War
• A total of 888,246 ceramic poppies in the moat around the Tower of London
• Each poppy represents British or Colonial military fatality during the war

Magial words:

cascade, representation, like a carpet of blood, consuming, flowing like a river, ancient walls stand like…, poppies standing tall like..., 

Dream Giver

Going to the Court Theatre

Today we went to the Court Theatre. Our tour guides were Emma (who took Room 4) and Lizzie (who took Room 3). First we went and sat down in our seats in the actual theatre and met Luke the music organiser and watched the band tune. Then we went over to see the dressing rooms and some basic props for 'Stag Weekend'. The props for 'Stag Weekend' were a possum, deer antlers, a Weet-bix box, phone, rifle, lighter, matches, crate of beer, Tui beer boxes, newspaper and duct tape. After we got to go on stage to see what it was like through the back of the trees and the shed.

After we went to the workshop to see all the bits of timber and wood and other props. Then we went and looked at the costume room. Emma said that the costume ladies were the busiest because they spent all day cutting and sewing and measuring fabrics. The ladies have to make the costume on dolls first to make sure it looked right before they made the real thing. 

Next we were very lucky to have a sneak peek of the people rehearsing.  It looked cool with some of the props.

Next we got to look around all the offices. By then we were very hungry so we sat down and had our morning tea. Then yay it was time for our drama acting. First we did some warm ups for our body, voice and brain. We had to use lots of imagination to do the acting.

By Kaylee

Storywriting Prompt

Gathering the ideas:
What happens before, during and after this image?

What is the setting?  
Where does it take place?

Who are the characters?
What do they look like?
How do they move or speak?
What are their habits.
How do they feel?

What is the problem?
How does it get worse?
How do you solve the problem?


Technical:
Where are you paragraphs?
Have you used magical words?
Have you used different punctuation.
Is there some speech in your story?

Five Sentence Challenge: Bus Stop

The church looked like a massive pin with a clock and a bell.

In the distance a flock of birds circling a small village there was also angry looking clouds.

Beside a small building there was a butcher wearing a apron the apron looked like a candy cane.

A bus was picking up some people witch makes me wonder were are they going.

there was a black and wight cat on a blue bench beside a man reading a news paper.

Alfonso Year 5

Five Sentence Challenge: The Bus Stop

Check out the picture prompt for this week's five sentence challenge.

It is due in on Wednesday and I will only be postiing up the work from the 'Boys Box' writers this week.

All other posts will be celebrated on our blogs and tweeted out on Friday for people to read.  Try getting your family to write you a comment on your post this week.

Try gathering some ideas for us in a comment under these headings:

1.  Nouns

bus, sky, church steeple, bicycle, butcher shop

2. Adjectives

tall, cloudy, dark, shiny, jolly, 

3.Verbs

Stopped, sitting, gathered, watching

4. Adverbs

Sitting silently, watching carefully

5. Similes

The dark sky hung over the village like a bad mood.

Be ready for an earthquake

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Prepare for an earthquake

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How to get ready for an earthquake

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How to get ready for a storm!

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What to do in a flood!

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Ripora's Dog by Tuala

Ripora's puppy is a small dog. It is about six to seven months old. Its name is Fatty.  I like the dog because it is playful. It loves people and cats. It doesn't just eat cats  it plays with them. The dog is a girl.

Ripora got Fatty in 2014 up in Opotiki where she use to live. She loves to lick peoples faces. Fatty  loves Ripora.

When Ripora goes out to wait for the bus the puppy cries. Where ever Ripora goes the dog follows her. Fatty even protects Ripora. Every time Fatty gets off the leash she will always goes inside.

Seven Puppies - Rosie's story

Chapter One:  Leaving home

Today is the day that the farmer is coming to pick up one of our puppies.  I’m standing in the dog run. I’m so nervous. I hope I don’t cry. I wonder what puppy will get chosen. I hope it’s not my favourite, not that I really have one but, I do like some better than the others.  The puppies are circling me like a pack of dolphins around a boat.  I pick up Stripes, her furry face rubs against my skin.   I hear the sound of two cars pulling up and soon a family of five are standing next to me in the run. The farmer picks up Nike and he says  ”I prefer black and white rather than the tricolours”  I give Nike one last hug as she heads to her new life.

Fern, Tui, Stripes and I

The next weeks went by and we still had six puppies. It was Monday and I was on the way home from  pottery with Sarah when dad said that a guy is coming to pick up Harry. I asked him if Harry had gone yet. He said he didn’t know.  After we dropped off Sarah we said a quick hello to mum and then zipped down to Bruce’s to see if Harry had gone yet. As we drove I had a sudden sadness. I didn’t know it was going to be this hard to say good-by to Harry. When Nike went it wasn’t this hard because the family looked friendly and they had kids plus Bruce knew them. I went over to the kennel where Harry was. A few more minutes went by, finallythe man came. He looked rough…. well he was rough.   I couldn’t hold it, Isecretly whimpered.

Chapter Two:  Drumble the droving dog

It was a nice and sunny day at my house. I am waiting for these people to come and pick up Drumble. When they got there they talked to my mum and dad.  When they were walking up the drive they started to talk about how I could come and  stay in their  holiday house to visit Drumble.  I was glad for Drumble that he was going to a happy home.  I called him Drumble after an adventurous droving dog in a book I read.

Chapter four: Sad news   

I had finished getting dressed when the phone rang. Dad answered it. He started his usual answer which starts like this. “Yeh, yeh oh oh” but the ending was different. “Oh no you poor thing.”

When dad got off the phone I could tell he was still thinking through what someone has just told him. I asked him what was wrong. He said that Aunty had to put down her dog Sassy.

” but” I mumbled “I know its sad” said Dad “but Sassy was attacking sheep.”

I asked Dad “How did it happen?”

 ”Well it is a long story. Aunty J was taking Sassy for her walk and she let sassy off.  Luckily sassy had a muzzle on otherwise she would have killed a sheep. So Aunty J thought she should put down sassy so she did.” I was shocked – me and Sassy were good friends. We used do tricks like going through the caterpillar tunnel and I used to hold treats at the other end. I felt sad for Aunty J knowing she didn’t want to do it.  I have a photo of all the dogs standing at the window with all their tongues out and Sassy is there.

Chapter Four:  All Gone

When I  go out to feed the puppies they are like a pack of lions. When you dangle meat over the cage the lions are jumping everywhere trying to rip your finger off.  Except the puppies aren’t trying to rip your fingers they are just wanting the meat in your hand. When they have finished I get Fern on a lead and let the puppies out and run them up and down the drive way except Fern sort of takes me for the run. 

 

One weekend we drove Sripes and Tinker  to their new home. Jeff was  taking Stripes and Tinker was going to live with my  Aunty  J.  I’m glad Tinker has got a great home like all the puppies but she’s also close to our house.

 I had a great experience with all the puppies.  It was annoying for mum and dad but fun for me when dad was trying to get me to school but I let the puppies out. Then we had to try and get them back into their pen. When mum was driving home after we dropped the last two puppies off slow,wet tears rolled down my face as I remembered our memories that we had together.  When I got home I opened the gate to where seven puppies were born.  Before it looked lively but now it looks lonely like they were never there.  I will always remember the bouncy, fluffy, happy puppies that used to live with us.       

By Rosie
Year 4 student

100 Word Challenge

Check out the prompt for this week.  You must have it finished and edited by Friday and e-mail it to me to upload it to the competition.