Check out Maya's Holiday

Maya went off on holiday and she made this movie to share it with us.  Great planning and voice-over Maya!

 

Five Sentence Challenge Showcase #17

Check out the showcase of the great writing from our 'Market' image.  Can we please put some comments on the posts of these children just learning how to write?

Science Experiment: Icy Fluid

Science Experiment: Melting chocolate

Zombie Attack

This is a story that Nina and Rosie wrote yesterday together on Google Docs. The have quite an imagination between them! Do not read this if you have nightmares!

One night a little girl called Georgia went into a graveyard to visit her grandma who was buried there.  It was so foggy Georgia could not see anything. The trees were like bodies standing in the mist.

Then she heard some groaning noises. There was a black shape in the distance. Bravely she took another step forwards, then she went tumbling down a hill. At the bottom she fell on something sticky.

When she woke up it was silent and she was sitting in a mysterious gloop. It wouldn’t let go of her, no matter how hard she tried to escape!  

The misty black shape in the distance was getting closer… but was it only one? Oh no, there were hundreds! Georgia realized that they were zombies! She was so scared that it seemed like the breath was being sucked from her lungs.  

Quickly Georgia used all her strength to break free from the gloop. She was running as fast as she could.  She was running for her life but the zombies were faster.

She stopped for just a second to get her breath and waited for the zombies to eat her. But she was still alive.  They had run straight past her.  They were headed for the city!

When the Zombies got to the centre of Christchurch City they bounded into the shops looking for brains to eat for supper. While Georgia was relieved that the zombies weren't going for her, she didn’t like the sudden scream she heard from the bakery shop.

Mr Cloud the bakery owner was getting his brain pulled out. As the author, I can’t described how gross it was because it would give you nightmares!

As the zombies went from shop to shop eating brains, Georgia suddenly thought about her family.  Would they be safe?  

The Zombies were peering into the windows of each house looking for more brains. The people were terrified when they saw the ugly faces of the zombies looking through their windows. Parents rushed to collect their children from school to keep them safe. Most of them didn’t make it, but some were lucky.

The parents screamed while the kids started to wail in agony as their brains got pulled out. But unfortunately the kids were all eaten after a while. The Zombies turned around slowly and stared at the the last lot of  the people in the city.  Georgia was still paralyzed from what she had just seen.

Then Georgia realised that it was all silent. No-one moved.  There was no sound!  She knew that her mum, dad and brother were gone. She burst into tears. Would she have to live with the zombies, she asked herself?

Then the zombies were coming towards her, and fast. Again she was running as fast as she could to survive. Then she realised that it was just a nightmare. She heard her mother calling her to get up. ` ‘Georgia, Georgia time to get up. It is time for school.”

She was so glad it was just a nightmare.

Experiment: More bubbles in Hokey Pokey

Experiment: Which acid makes the nicest cheese?

Experiment: Hokey Pokey with more bubbles

Experiments: Salty Ice Melting

5 Sentence Challenge # 18

Check out this picture to write about.  Think about our SLOW WRITING - could we use that idea to help us with the 5SC?

Constructive Comments from students

Take a look at the comments you are making on the writing of others.  Are they constructive comments?

Submitted on June 20, 2014 at 10:24 AM | In reply to phoebe (Guest).

Hi Phoebe, You could go back and reread your comment and correct the mistakes in your comment. 
Rosie


Submitted on June 19, 2014 at 9:50 AM
Hey Ryan 
Thats is Wicked! The emerald staff will really help you when you face ender dragon. Why do you like the Hunger games?

Submitted on June 17, 2014 at 11:57 AM

Hi Alfonso I like the way you put the story together. Maby you could of had your own piture. How do you enchant. 
By Jack B – 9 years old. 
http://springstonteamendeavour.blogspot.co.nz/

Submitted on June 17, 2014 at 11:54 AM

WOW 
what a good post Jack. 
love the way you said like a thunder storm to describe the cat. 
I think you need to add more detail to your story.
Emma

Submitted on June 17, 2014 at 11:47 AM

I do like your post Aria, but one of your sentences do not make sense. 
You should go back and reread your story to see if it makes sense.
Nina

Oooo - Rosie is famous!

Check it out!  Rosie is the first blog post on the http://blogdipping.org.uk  website.  The person running the website is

the amazing person who runs the 5 Sentence Challenge and 100 Word Challenge.

Go and have a look at Rosie on the blog and I challenge you to go back a post on our blog and visit the writers of the 5SC and give them some AKOKids comments!