A sour worm looks like a ridged elastic mountain
with sugary snow crystals on top of it.
It smells like sweaty shoes
that make you catch your breath.
But when you eat one
its little kick sets off a sour explosion.
But when you eat one
its little kick sets off a sour explosion.
Nice poem Jake! It is a funny yet convincing poem. I could literally taste them in my mouth!
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I like how you used different words in your poem and expressed them differently.
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Wow nice poem Jake. You really described the sour worm and its taste. I don't think I want to eat one.
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