tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7097017478484712415.post9162445020342893684..comments2023-03-25T23:13:13.610+13:00Comments on Springston Waka Endeavour: Before SunriseUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7097017478484712415.post-32079666247295067152013-04-12T14:31:15.253+12:002013-04-12T14:31:15.253+12:00I like the way you put lots of similes in your sto...I like the way you put lots of similes in your story. They made me really understand your story.<br />... The reflection of the moon on the roof is like shooting stars. <br />... Around the doors there are carved patterns like worms digging holes in the dirt. .... A tuft pops up like a light saber out of the Shadow's head.<br /><br />Next time you could start with different story starts<br /><br />from Liam age 9<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com